sitting quiet in a room
oh well..! really..? was i as quite as a silence in a room..?
my mind was brimming as water.. was full of thoughts like flowing water.. ,
was sitting and dreaming of success and peace !
not only a plan .. but yes a desire to have that peace..!
a peace of mind , a peace of kind !
a peace that to ultimate BLIND .. of seeing those nature's mind..!
a peace that to ultimate DEAF .. of listening those people's mind..!
a peace that of roaming in those solemn fields..!
a peace where i could relate to me own ..
where no tech. & smoke could enter anymore..!
where my perceptions are very true..! .. the perceptions of me and "MY DIARY.."..!
A RELATION THAT ME ND MY PENCIL SHARES..! :)
but at last a "peace" that one gets after eating that food:)
well the end is beautiful.. well the end is amalgum of peace..!
the peace of my own world - " an isolated world of beauty and me " .. " the world of me and my pen name " :)
- R!y@
poem is very nice riya :-) amazing amalgamation of thoughts and words.
ReplyDeletebut my personal suggestion as a true critic , try to mold the thoughts in simple language and lighter mood :-)
concept was good but i would appreciate simplicity in words more :-)
keep it up
Regards
Deletevishal
vishal bhaiya.. :) thank you for ur true cmnts.. ! they are motivating.. well i m new.. i m learning nd by gaining knowledge nd support only 1 day i ll grew to heights.. :)
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